MY HOLIDAY WRITING 😺

~ My Holiday ~

Recount Writing

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I am going to

• plan your recount before you start writing.
• add detail and interesting vocabulary to support your ideas.
• read your recount to check it makes sense, you have added paragraphs you have corrected your punctuation and spelling.
• give and accept constructive ideas.

Step 1: Using keywords brainstorm on what happened...

Step 2: Share your plan with your team adding adjectives and action verbs. 

Step 3: Start writing your recount from your plan.

Step 4: Re craft your story to add more detail and interesting words as you finish each  

section of the plan.

Step 5: Edit your recount putting in your capital letters, full stops and paragraphs.

Step 6: Team conference your recount.

Step 7: Link your recount to the “check in” sheet and embed on your blog.

Checklist: I used my brainstorm ideas to help me plan my recount. I have written my recount. I have used the correct punctuation (full stops, capital letters, etc.). I have added descriptive words (adjectives, action verbs). I have added paragraphs to my writing. I have used at least 2 of my senses in my writing (hear, see, taste, smell, touch). I have used my recount rubric.

Plan

Title: The Worst Of It, The Best Of It
Date: October, 2019
Introduction (first paragraph)
Who? me Jesse dad mum-new baby What?Bodie was being born  When?a Rainy Saturday  Where?in Women's Hospital  Why? bodie was being born How? mum was pregnant How is my introduction going to grab the audience? Start with creating picture in reader's mind -  or simile -  or onomatopoeia -
3-4 Experiences (Each new experience equals a new paragraph) What do you see, hear, feel, smell, taste
Experience: 1) going to the Hospital	Descriptive language/ elaborate: → zooming like lightning to womens Hospital because baby bodie was being born.
2) we had to stay in the waiting room	→ I was so bored we had to stay in the waiting room for 2 HOURS.
3) he was born	→ my mum was relieved that he was born.
4) we went home	→ in 2 seconds flat we were off home.
Conclusion: How did your adventure go? How did you feel about the experience?

The Worst Of It, The Best Of It - with subheadings

by Sharon                       Conferenced with                         

Introduction

Experience 1

We were like lightning to womens hospital because a little baby was being born. Me jesse dad, mum and the baby were swarming around the Hospital. We had to stay in the waiting room for 2 HOURS! but then AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! 

Experience 2

My dad raced into the room. 10 mins latter boom bang crash ahh… baby bodie was born. Creek creek! CREEK! the door busted down! b b but treats a whole tray of them YUMMY. I was the happiest girl on earth. Mum had to stay at the hospital for 1 more night. When my dad woke up i was already awake and dressed. 

Experience 3

We picked them up and had some mc donalds. and i got to hold bodie for the first time. But he was so hungry he started chewing my t-shirt but then waaaaaaaaa!   

Experience 4

He was screaming at the top of his lungs. In the morning I had bags under my eyes my hair was dreadid so I had a short nap but i was still grumpy. In my head I wanted to scream as loud as I could b b but he was SO CUTE i couldn't even touch him. I had the best holiday… EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Conclusion

Did I retype the whole story without the subheadings?  

THINK ABOUT IT!!!

                          The Best Of It All In One Day 

by sophie                     

We were like lightning to women's hospital because a little baby was being born. Me Jesse dad, mum and the baby were swarming around the Hospital. We had to stay in the waiting room for 2 HOURS! but then AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH My dad raced into the room. 10 Min's latter boom bang crash ahh… baby bodies was born. Creek creek CREEK the door busted down! b b but treats a whole tray of them YUMMY. I was the happiest girl on earth. Mum had to stay at the hospital for 1 more night. When my dad woke up i was already awake and dressed.We picked them up and had some mc Donald's. and i got to hold bodie for the first time. But he was so hungry he started chewing my t-shirt but then waaaaaaaaa!   He was screaming at the top of his lungs. In the morning I had bags under my eyes my hair was dreaded so I had a short nap but i was still grumpy. In my head I wanted to scream as loud as I could b b but he was SO CUTE i couldn't even touch him. I hat the best holiday… EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Conclusion

Did I retype the whole story without the subheadings? 

Monday mash up

FOR MONDAY MASH UP…

• I made a cute little puppy & a mustache cat.

• We learnt how to stick clay on the right way.

• You put water on your finger. then you circle the space you want

• to stick the other piece of clay.

• And then we painted it 

• I` painted my dog brown. 

  

• and my cat light brown.

Our Building Bridges Inquiry

😂Monday mash up😂/clay dog🐕

on Monday mash up I made a dog out of clay first you roll it into a ball and then start to make it to stick things on get some water on your hand and rub it on the place you want to stick it and stick the bit on and twist and swish it on.

SK should kids be able to jump of bridges

my bridge trip

The Rehua Marae trip

On Wednesday the 18th of September I went to Rehua

Marae.
We had to bring a blanket  pillow toilet tree cloths for the

next day
Pjs and optional things like slippers baking and school uniform.  
I found that doing arts and crafts with Caitlin and Izack was

fun.
I found weaving challenging. This was challenging because we 
had to fold up and down and under and over it was very hard.
For dinner we had lazanya for dessert we had ice cream and
For breakfast we had yummy weet bix with peaches and

pears.
We did fun activities like drawing and making pois and

weaving.
I enjoyed staying the night at Rehua Marae I hope I will be seeing it again. 

would you hide in closet or a bed room in a tornado

WOULD IT BE BETTER TO HIDE         

in a Closet or a bedroom in a tornado

If a tornado comes the tornado 

will bust throw and get you if you 

are in a bed room if you are in a lock 

able closet then if it picks you up you have 

a chance of living so I choose closet     

S.K synthesis Eggs,floods

the cats victory 🐈

                               the cats victory

One day there was a cat named trouble. She was very shy she went into a dumpster alley. But then KABOOM a huge portal came out of nowhere Rumble Rumble shake shake zoom she got slurped into the  portal.  "MEOW" 'where am I" she said she was in the alley but it was dark and there were black splats of paint every were red eyes on every face but the worst thing was... dogs they were every were police had them dairy peps had them and bananas OK maybe that last one is a lie but the cats poor poor cats no water no home an an NO FOOD those people they pay no respect to us so I searched for a cat army to destroy every one ha ha ha so first I went to the shop I didn't read the sign because I'm a CAT but it it said PET SHOP ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
I said very LOUD! but it more sounded like meow MEOW! I saw a very fat cat "meow meow I'm a fat cat meow meow I'm a fat cat" he said over and over again but at one point I shoved a carrot up his nose and slapped him across the face   and toke him to the ally but... dogs came you no what I HATE DOGS they are the enemy of CATS I hate dogs I hate DOGS well they toke fat cat but he didn't move he was so heavy they couldn't move him off the floor so we ran but they chased some other cats so I left with (interruption) "I'm a fat cat" sigh yes your a fat cat now SHUT-UP then we went to the the CAT FOREST the nest of cats "meow meow la la meow meow la la la LA!" HISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSs!
ya they are not friendly but "LA LA LA" the god of the cats MOON STAR the only winged cat in the hole inter world she didn't want to come but she eventuality said yes because of my wining (REWIND) PLEASES I TELL YOU  I'M POOR AND I'M LONELY PLEASES!!! OK NOW SHUT-UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!YA OK that was weird so ya we were going to kill every one 😈 first we got in discuses fat cat is THE DOG moon star is THE DOG and trouble is THE DOG so song time: first the killed EVERYONE THE END

what would you do if you got killed by cats?

😮SURVIVAL STORY what would you do?

you are visiting your cousin. your cousin lives in new York in the mountains  it is getting late and it is ONE FOOT (30 cm) OF SNOW around. you decide to go hiking in the mountains your cousin knows the area well and leads the way into a area of the mountains she is gone you no that your cousin likes playing jokes so you stay it is getting later and you cant see her you have a pack and dry fruit and water it will get dark before you can retrace your steps what do you do?

1: I would use my jacket                                                                                                                            blanket.

                                                                                                                                     
2: make a cave out of snow
and find big logs from under the snow find two rocks
and rub them on the ground to make a fire to cook food.

3:find a stick from one of the edges of the mountains sharpen it
on the ground go look for some bear to cook.

4: and when you find a bear and
slide it on a sharp stick and cook it then
 use the bear skin as a coat and go find your friend.

                                    what would you do?

                                         

Orana park trip!

have you ever been to orana park

learning Te Reo numbers 0-20 with lisa Marie

do you know Te Reo

I love my teachers ❤️

I love my teachers because they take care of us teach us be kind to us do fun stuff with us and they help us when we need them we love our teachers.
do you love your teachers?

Rain cloud observations☁️

Rain cloud observations☁️

Making a cloud

We put some water in about ¾ then we put shaving cream on
top and let it set for a little bit then we put drops of yellow and
red food colouring on the shaving cream it didn’t do anything
but when we put lots of drops in… IT DRIZZLED! Everywhere
in the cup red and yellow and red everywhere in the cup we
had done it yay! so I learned that the sun warms up the

water and the water vapour go's into the cloud and the wind
moves and when it gets to full it rains that is what I learnd from
this water cycle 🠟↓↓↓

                             

sahara desert facts😲

1: There are various plants that grow in the Sahara Desert. 

2: Vegetation that grow in the Sahara must be able to adapt to unreliable precipitation and        excessive heat.

3: To survive they have made modification leaves into spines to prevent excessive loss of           water from the plant body and deep roots to get to water source.

4: Plants are more concentrated in oases and along river beds.

5: African Peyote Cactus thrives in the desert environment.

6: Its thick stems retain water for long periods of time.                                                                                    

facts about Waipoua forest 🌴🌷🌴😲

1: Kauri is part of New Zealand’s heritage. But, kauri dieback is threatening their        extinction.
2:This forest is the home of Tane Mahuta, the country's largest kauri tree, which        is approximately 2,000 years old and still growing.
3: Of all New Zealand’s kauri forests, none is more famous than Waipoua Forest        on the west coast, 
4: Waipoua is an ancient green world of towering trees and rare birds.  

5: highway through the forest is memorable for the natural gateways created by        huge kauri trees and the fringing of colourful ferns along the road's edge.
6:Father of the Forest'  which is estimated to be between 2,500 and 3,000 years       old.

TOWER CHALLENGE🙀

On Tuesday the 6th we had to build a tower out of 9 cups a handful of blocks and 20 sticks this is what we made

😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮😮

FACTS ABOUT SAND DUNES

If we didn't have sand dunes there would be storms flooding every were. Sand dunes are important to us also native plants they protect the sand dunes. The plants help if the sand is blowing away. If the  sand  blows at the sand dunes it will hurt them and we don't want that. If we didn't have sand dunes
 it would be very hard on us. Sand dunes protect us from flooding or having a storm. Sand dunes help us a lot.

monday mash up diary

fantastic animals🐅🐒🐦

1: Bats or pekapeka are particularly special in New Zealand as they are the only native      land mammal 

2: Hectors dolphins are the worlds smallest dolphin species. They are named after Sir      James Hector 
3 :Tuataras are the only surviving reptile species from the dinosaur era which gives        
     them the nickname the living dinosaur
4: The morepork or ruru is New Zealand’s only remaining native owl. The owl species            is also found in Tasmania.
5:The Hookers sea lion is One of the most endangered sea lion species in the world
                                                                       😻

my home towen chrischurch

Christchurch is my home towen there are outdoor water parks sea gulls church and more
I love my home

facts about nz

1: The Maori name of New Zealand is Aoatearoa that means the land of the long white cloud.
2: New Zealanders are also called Kiwis but kiwi is not a fruit. It is New Zealand’s native flightless bird.
3: Auckland's sky tower is the tallest freestanding structure in the Southern Hemisphere at 328 meters high

the poam about sophie

sophie

Fast crafty sister of Jesse,

Lover of dogs family drawing, 
Who feels like my bucket is full
it's like I am

speical,
who gives money and  Mum And dad
hugs,
who fear bugs and large animals,  
who would like pets candy family,  who
comes from Auckland but living in
crischirch.                      

My Inquiry Action Plan

Oana park trip

On Wensday 26th of June we were going to Orana park my mum the other parents came to we hoped on the bus and when we got there Sasha our tour guyed showed us the lions "ROAR" Sasha said "next we are going to see giraffes wow I thought in my head we saw a big long sported neck and she said "if you get head butted
by a giraffe you will break your neck" then we saw the Tasmanian devils Sasha said "they are getting a disease that is when they get a pus face and they are trying to stop it" then we ate a yummy lunch "yum yum" and we saw gorillas and spider monkeys they were so funny and then we went home.

monday mash up

                                           on monday we had a choice of doing a rock or painting we chose to
                                           do rocks aznd this is are disien

Matariki

                                           We made Matariki fish on Thursday 27th. her name
                                           is Skylar. I made her by folding and cutting an gluing
                                            colored paper and tape.

the scary ride

The wheels began turning as the carriage started moving
along the tracks.

My heart starts to pound as it burns up and up at the top. I looked
down and

zoom!!! My tummy dropped “Ahhhh!” I said very loud. It felt like
my tummy fell

on 20 nails. I thought it was over but...ahhhhhhhhh!
A huge drop came out of

nowhere. The man next to me splattered vomit on me.

“Ewwwww” I said but the


man didn’t even say
sorry! In my head I was so angry at him but

I said you gutbucket,

luckily he didn’t hear.

I saw the end of the ride, “Phew” I said.