MY HOLIDAY WRITING 😺

~ My Holiday ~

Recount Writing

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Conferenced with:

I am going to

• plan your recount before you start writing.
• add detail and interesting vocabulary to support your ideas.
• read your recount to check it makes sense, you have added paragraphs you have corrected your punctuation and spelling.
• give and accept constructive ideas.

Step 1: Using keywords brainstorm on what happened...

Step 2: Share your plan with your team adding adjectives and action verbs. 

Step 3: Start writing your recount from your plan.

Step 4: Re craft your story to add more detail and interesting words as you finish each  

section of the plan.

Step 5: Edit your recount putting in your capital letters, full stops and paragraphs.

Step 6: Team conference your recount.

Step 7: Link your recount to the “check in” sheet and embed on your blog.

Checklist: I used my brainstorm ideas to help me plan my recount. I have written my recount. I have used the correct punctuation (full stops, capital letters, etc.). I have added descriptive words (adjectives, action verbs). I have added paragraphs to my writing. I have used at least 2 of my senses in my writing (hear, see, taste, smell, touch). I have used my recount rubric.

Plan

Title: The Worst Of It, The Best Of It
Date: October, 2019
Introduction (first paragraph)
Who? me Jesse dad mum-new baby What?Bodie was being born  When?a Rainy Saturday  Where?in Women's Hospital  Why? bodie was being born How? mum was pregnant How is my introduction going to grab the audience? Start with creating picture in reader's mind -  or simile -  or onomatopoeia -
3-4 Experiences (Each new experience equals a new paragraph) What do you see, hear, feel, smell, taste
Experience: 1) going to the Hospital	Descriptive language/ elaborate: → zooming like lightning to womens Hospital because baby bodie was being born.
2) we had to stay in the waiting room	→ I was so bored we had to stay in the waiting room for 2 HOURS.
3) he was born	→ my mum was relieved that he was born.
4) we went home	→ in 2 seconds flat we were off home.
Conclusion: How did your adventure go? How did you feel about the experience?

The Worst Of It, The Best Of It - with subheadings

by Sharon                       Conferenced with                         

Introduction

Experience 1

We were like lightning to womens hospital because a little baby was being born. Me jesse dad, mum and the baby were swarming around the Hospital. We had to stay in the waiting room for 2 HOURS! but then AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! 

Experience 2

My dad raced into the room. 10 mins latter boom bang crash ahh… baby bodie was born. Creek creek! CREEK! the door busted down! b b but treats a whole tray of them YUMMY. I was the happiest girl on earth. Mum had to stay at the hospital for 1 more night. When my dad woke up i was already awake and dressed. 

Experience 3

We picked them up and had some mc donalds. and i got to hold bodie for the first time. But he was so hungry he started chewing my t-shirt but then waaaaaaaaa!   

Experience 4

He was screaming at the top of his lungs. In the morning I had bags under my eyes my hair was dreadid so I had a short nap but i was still grumpy. In my head I wanted to scream as loud as I could b b but he was SO CUTE i couldn't even touch him. I had the best holiday… EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Conclusion

Did I retype the whole story without the subheadings?  

THINK ABOUT IT!!!

                          The Best Of It All In One Day 

by sophie                     

We were like lightning to women's hospital because a little baby was being born. Me Jesse dad, mum and the baby were swarming around the Hospital. We had to stay in the waiting room for 2 HOURS! but then AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH My dad raced into the room. 10 Min's latter boom bang crash ahh… baby bodies was born. Creek creek CREEK the door busted down! b b but treats a whole tray of them YUMMY. I was the happiest girl on earth. Mum had to stay at the hospital for 1 more night. When my dad woke up i was already awake and dressed.We picked them up and had some mc Donald's. and i got to hold bodie for the first time. But he was so hungry he started chewing my t-shirt but then waaaaaaaaa!   He was screaming at the top of his lungs. In the morning I had bags under my eyes my hair was dreaded so I had a short nap but i was still grumpy. In my head I wanted to scream as loud as I could b b but he was SO CUTE i couldn't even touch him. I hat the best holiday… EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Conclusion

Did I retype the whole story without the subheadings? 

Monday mash up

FOR MONDAY MASH UP…

• I made a cute little puppy & a mustache cat.

• We learnt how to stick clay on the right way.

• You put water on your finger. then you circle the space you want

• to stick the other piece of clay.

• And then we painted it 

• I` painted my dog brown. 

  

• and my cat light brown.